Wednesday 12 August 2015
Trolley Recount - Past Experience
This recount is about a past experience that I experienced a few months ago. Me and my current best friend were bored during my mums shopping day so we decided to play around in the trolleys. This event happened to be a very memorable day for me and my best friend. I hope you enjoy and read the WHOLE presentation. Our WALT is to write a past experience relating to something we 'myself' did in our childhood. AKA(childhood memory.
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Tino Pai Chardonnay! I had the giggles as I read your story as I could imagine you and your friend having fun with the trolley. This playful experience is a similar one I saw at the supermarket the other day.
I like the way you used descriptive, figurative language to support the key ideas in your story. I also like the way you describe how the trolley called out to you and your friend and the way your laughter echoed from afar.
What do you think you could do to level up your writing skills? Use the writing rubric to help you identify the next steps for writing.
Kapai Chardonnay - this was a very enjoyable recount to read!
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